Tuesday, September 1, 2009
Singaporean
Euthanasia
Monday, August 3, 2009
English assessment
Once they had prepared the things they needed for the picnic, they set off to the lakeside where the boat would come and picked them up. The boat arrived; they went to the near-by bench to pick up their belongings as while they were waiting for the boat, they placed their belongings on the bench and went around for some fresh air. They settled down in the boat when suddenly Buvan exclaimed, “Oh no! We left the picnic mat on the bench, remember?” That’s when Rathi realised, “Yes, we left the picnic mat on the bench. Buvan, why don’t we go back and retrieved it?” Buvan agreed. Just when the both of them have their feets off the boat, the boat sailed off leaving them behind. They have no choice but to wait for the second arrival of the boat to bring them over to the mountain field site.
The boat was still in sight for the both of them, they were sitting at the bench chatting away while waiting for the second arrival of the boat. A loud blast was heard, deafening enough for the both of them, they turned and looked at the lakeside. They could not believed their eyes, a tragedy scene had happened in front of them. The boat was bombed, pieces of the boat flying across the air and sinking into the water. They can’t help but to cry out with tears streaming down their cheeks, “Papa, Mama!” Just a few moments ago, they were still happily with their family, having the thought that they were going to have a nice and enjoyable day at the mountain field site. But now… it turned out to be a tragedy scene instead. They saw two men who were from Tamil tigers leaving from a boat, that’s when they realised the Tamil tigers were behind it, they caused bombing on the boat. They were filled with anger. Buvan clenched his fist and said,” I hate the Tamil tigers! I’m going to join the Sri Lanka army to go against the Tamil tigers!” Buvan’s mind was filled with revenge for his family. Buvan said in his softest tone, “Rathi, you’ll support me to join the Sri Lanka army, right?” Rathi, with eyes as red as bloodshot, still with tears replied, “I’ll support you.” Buvan roared out in anger, " Nothing could bring back the lives of my father and mother back, one day i'll make the Tamil tigers pay back."
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